MY BEST ADVICE
For the final cut, I would focus on adding more background in the beginning and maybe one more story about him in the middle, because your conclusion was very strong.
WHY IT’S MY BEST ADVICE
I believe this was the best advice I have given because it aids in helping the speaker meet the time frame the speech needs to. Plus, I hope it shows that I paid attention to how the speech ended really strong, but in the beginning it seemed like it was missing something to grab the audience’s attention. I hope that the advice I gave reached the person to also help in organization of the speech, because it deals with balancing out the introduction and body points of the speech.
BEST ADVICE FROM MY PEERS
Maybe you could work on focusing your stories into more concrete points so it’s easier for your audience to follow along
WHY IT’S THEIR BEST ADVICE
I think this is the best advice I have received because it demonstrates that I need to create a better flow of how I speak. I can infer that since my points do not sound concrete, it’s harder for my audience to follow along and continue to stay engaged. Plus, I feel like it is a fix that is definitely doable and can easily be applied to my final cut. I do think that it stems from needing to improve my outlines to create better transitions, so overall this was good feedback because it’s very direct and clear.
Speech 1, final cut; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RNIE22Yql6Q&feature=youtu.be
Speech 2, dry run; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f_SAXrL_Xbw&t=2s
Speech 2, final cut; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FWjHd4a3NyA&feature=youtu.be
Speech 3, dry run; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bYfC-4zOz44&t=5s
Speech 3, final cut; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cz67U5S5oA0&t=1s
Speech 4, dry run; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gXCySkKIzUM&t=1s
Speech 4, final cut; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=itVuDbB_Lxk
Speech 5, dry run; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m-5ZP47Z87g&t=87s
Speech 5, final cut; https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HcpARuLXt90&t=30s
MY BIGGEST STRIDES
I believe my biggest strides between dry-run and final cut were from my mean to me speech. After reading the feedback on from my peers, I agreed that it was definitely evident that my thesis and main points were not clear in the speech. Plus, this is something that I have come to notice, but I genuinely feel like pulling my hair up and away from my face helped in my performance. I was able to start telling the stories about my boyfriend James at (0:44) in a smoother and cleaner transition than of the dry-run speech. Overall, I completely changed the organization of that speech which allowed for the content to be better and more clear to my audience.
THE SECRETS TO MY SUCCESS: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JpLbS3HecGk
